如何回复建议信

2015-03-19 13:56
高中生学习·高二版 2014年12期
关键词:浠水高二时态

⊙ 浠水一中 汤青海 李 可

假如你是某报社编辑,收到了李华的一封来信。请仔细阅读下面的来信,并用英语写一封回信,分析他遇到的问题并提出合理建议。

Dear Bob,

Im a student from Xinhua Senior High School. I have some difficulty communicating with my parents. Although I have tried my best, I find it really difficult to make them satisfied. So I feel lonely sometimes. I would be grateful if you would give me some advice.

Best wishes,

Yours,

Li hua

注意: 1. 词数:100字左右;

2. 可适当增加细节,使行文连贯。

写好这样的作文要注意以下几点:

1. 格式规范 回复建议信和写建议信一样,通常由六部分组成:信头(发信人地址和发信日期)、信内地址(收信人姓名、职位和地址)、称呼、正文、结束语和署名。实际写信时通常把信头和信内地址省略。

2. 态度正确 写信的目的是提出建议或忠告,不是投诉信,也不是命令和责斥,所以态度要谦恭诚恳,观点要合情合理,语言要得体,尽量让对方容易接受。

3. 思路清晰 对对方提出的问题要认真领会,准确理解,然后依次回复。要做到观点鲜明,条理清晰,简明扼要,以理服人,让对方觉得“纳而有因,拒而有理”。

4. 时态和人称 通常用一般现在时态,第一人称。

写作准备

开头常用的句式有:

You have asked me for my advice about/on...

I will try to make some useful suggestions.

表达建议的常用句式有:

In my opinion, it would be beneficial/useful if...

I would recommend/advise that...

You do not have to devote all your time to...

If I were you, I would...

Id like to suggest that...

May I suggest that...?

I am writing to advise you...

As far as I am concerned...

In my opinion, you would be wise to take the following action.

first of all; meanwhile, in addition..., its important for you to...

结尾常用句式有:

Please inform me when you have come to a decision.

I am looking forward to your reply.

Please take good consideration of my advice.

I will be glad if you find my suggestions useful.

习作1

浠水一中高二(24)班 陈哲

Dear Li Hua,

Im very glad to receive your letter. Thank you for your trust.

You have asked me for my advice about your trouble. In your adolescence, you may meet with such problem: You have some difficulty in communicating with your parents. You cant share your ideas with them. Thats natural. Maybe its what we call “generation gap”. But in reality, its not their fault because they have very high expectations on you.

In my opinion, you would be wise to take the following action. First of all, be brave to tell your parents your ideas and listen carefully to their opinions. Meanwhile, be absorbed in your work to achieve their hope. Im sure they will be satisfied with you.

Yours,

Bob

点评

1. 这是一篇比较优秀的习作,结构清晰,行文流畅。作者从整体上抓住了文章的写作意图,有较好的说服力:第一段简洁,第二段分析问题也比较到位,短语、连接词和从句的恰当运用反映了作者较强的语言能力。endprint

2. 第三段是主要内容,写了两个方面的建议,比较恰当。也可以用on the one hand, ... on the other hand...这样的连接语。当然,此段建议的分量略显不够,有待拓展。

3. 本文另一个不足的是没有用结束语,这是建议信不可忽视的。

习作2

浠水一中高二(13)班 周莎

Dear Li Hua,

Im happy to hear from you. I hope I can help you with your problem.

Its normal that your opinions are often different from your parents in your age. Teenagers often find its hard to communicate with them. On the contrary, they are always not satisfied with you. In fact, there is a “generation gap” between you and your parents. How can we deal with it?

I think it would be beneficial if you open your mind to your parents and communicate with them sincerely. You can share your ideas with them and listen carefully to their thoughts. Work harder than before to reach their expectations. Try to love them and they will understand you and will be satisfied with you.

Please take good consideration of my advice.

Best wishes.

Yours,

Bob

点评

作者按照回复建议信的格式,非常完整地完成了写作任务,脉络清晰,表达也准确。不足的是,有的地方显示的是汉语思维,在句子与句子之间,第三段开头等处,应该适当增加一些关联词,如in my opinion,in addition, whats more等,使文章更自然、流畅。

范文

Dear Li Hua,

I feel greatly honored to be trusted with your personal affairs.

I have to say that you are not alone when having trouble communicating with parents. Almost everybody had it when they are in the adolescence. Therefore, its a common problem shared by many, whose cause lies in what they call “generation gap”.

As for my advice to you, first of all, dont hide your feelings. You can make it a routine to share your thoughts with your parents. Secondly, convince them that you have tried your best. Its not their fault to place too high expectation on their child. I believe they will be satisfied with you so long as they know you have tried your best to live up to their standards. Anyway, there is no one who loves you more than your parents in the world. Whatever you are, they will always be there for you. Love them, and love can heal everything.

Good luck!

Yours,

Bobendprint

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