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石继忠 男，1989年参加工作，中学高级教师、济宁市骨干教师、市级教学能手，在多年的英语教学工作中，积累了丰富的教学经验，形成了自己独特的教学方法;从教以来一直负责初中毕业班的教学工作，在历年的中考中，所执教的班级都取得了优异的成绩，受到学校和社会各界的一致好评;曾先后在省级、国家级报刊发表论文一百多篇，现担任《英语周报》《英语辅导报》《学生英语报》《英语画刊》《英语园地》等多家报刊的特约编辑。

Everyone has his or her own hobby. Collection is the one in which many people are interesting①. My hobby is collecting coins of different nations.

I collect coins because I treasure them as the works of art. Most coins have a head portrait cast on the front side of it， such as American coins with the portraits of George Washington， Abraham Lincoln， British coins with Elizabeth II， and some others② people who were famous in history. Some coins have the designs of buildings， animals and plants.

I collect coins also because I like the process of collection. A long period of time is needed in gathering one nations whole set of coins. It is very difficult of③ me to find the very coin I want. Sometimes I obtained a coin but I didnt know which nation it came from， I must therefore look around for books or ask some friends. How happy I was when I finally found its value.

I have accumulated a great deal of knowledges④ about the history and culture of different nations from these small coins. The coins will be my spiritual wealth in my lifetime.

山東梁山杨营中学九年级（4）班 高翔

1. 优点：

这篇文章结构合理，体现了形式和内容的统一。每段各有重点，但始终不离主题。另外，准确的词语表达和句型的多样化也为文章增添了不少色彩。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①interesting改为interested。interesting用来形容事物，interested用来形容人。

②others去掉s。这里要用形容词other来修饰后面的people。

③of改为for，此处意为“对……来说……”。

④knowledges去掉s。knowledge为不可数名词。

3. 评分：

按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改后可得12分。