A Letter

欧阳颖熙

Dear Dr. Know，

Can you help me？ Im not happy because there are too many rules in my life. I get up at 5：50 every morning. After breakfast， I cant leave the dirty dishes in the kitchen. I run to school because I cant be late of class.

At school， I dont run in the hallways and eat in the classroom. I have to wear a school uniform. After school， I must do my homework first. I cant watch TV at school days. I have to go bed before 10：00. Rules， rules， rules！ Its terrible. I never have fun. What can I do？

Amily

李凌媛老师点评：

作文要求是写一封信给Dr. Know， 告诉他关于你生活中的所有规则，并且写出你对这些规则的感受。此文行文流畅，条理清楚，用词恰当。作者针对家规和校规两方面进行阐述。文中情态动词 must， have to， can以及cant 的用法准确，内容恰当，紧扣主题，且运用介词短语at home， at school和副词then 过渡，使得文章过渡显得非常自然。结尾部分用3个rules表达作者的厌恶之情，最后以一个问句结尾，希望Dr. Know提供帮助，都表达得比较到位。但是也存在一定问题，如词组be late for中介词搭配错误，否定句中连接词用or来表示“和”，go to bed漏掉了介词to。

Dear Dr. Know，

Can you help me？ Im not happy because there are too many rules in my life. At home， I must get up at 5：50 every morning. After breakfast， I cant leave the dirty dishes in the kitchen. Then I run to school because I cant be late for school.

At school， I cant run in the hallways or eat in the classroom. I have to wear a school uniform. After school， I must do my homework first. I cant watch TV on school days， but I can watch TV on weekends. I have to go to bed before 10：00. Rules， rules， rules！ Its terrible. I never have fun. What can I do？

Amily