A Survey of the Health Club

张祖平 男，80后英语教师，就职于浙江省绍兴市树人中学，爱好阅读、翻译和写作。在英语教学中，注重分层教学，尤其善于激励英语基础薄弱的学生，用他们的兴趣爱好引导他们愉快地阅读。自主研发的“E飞英语口语考试小程序”荣获2018年绍兴市教师自制教具比赛一等奖。

Hello， everyone！

The Health Club has just made a survey about the habits of our students. Today we are going to share the results. Many of the students by bike or walk to school①. They dont eat snacks for② breakfast and lunch. They do sports a lot③. So they are very healthy.

But some of the students take their parents car④ to school. They eat lots of meat. And they never do sports so theyre fat and heavy.

I think its not difficult to have good habits. Healthy food and enough sleep are both important for us because we are grow⑤ up.

浙江省绍兴市树人中学初一（5）班 曾江涛

1. 优点：

本文紧扣要点，语言简洁，能准确使用单数和复数及相应的代词。全文脉络清晰，观点明确。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①此句建议改为：Most students go to school by bike or on foot.或Most students ride bikes or walk to school. 连词or连接的应该是并列结构，原句中by bike并非动词短语，而是介词短语。另外，“大部分学生”应该用most students。

②“兩餐之间”用between...and结构，也就是把for改为between。

③此句建议改为：They do a lot of exercise. 读起来更流畅。

④此句中人和车都是复数，并且有所属关系，应该用上名词所有格结构parents cars。

⑤在英语中，be动词后面是不能直接跟动词原形的，应该把grow改为growing，这样就变成了现在进行时结构，意为“我们正在成长”。

3. 评分：

按中考英语作文满分10分的评分标准，本文修改前可得6分。