浑然天成，有效衔接文本

浙江 彭文国

【问题导读】

读后续写是新高考改革在考试检测方面最重要的代表题型之一，目前也被证明是最有效的高考题型之一。它不仅仅是对读写能力的综合考查，更重要的是它有效地考查了考生对故事逻辑发展的意识和敏感性；考查了考生构思主旨一致、语言风格一致、故事发展逻辑顺畅的文章的能力。然而，在平时的实践中，学生很难把握故事的逻辑，主要表现在：

1. 对原文所展现的主旨思想把握不准，续写的内容偏离原文主旨。

2. 续写时没有关注所给段首句和相关部分的内容衔接，因而续写的内容和所给段首句连接不够顺畅。

3. 忽视了原文中的重要信息，续写的内容和原文出现信息误差甚至矛盾。

【名师导学】

一篇优秀的续写，一定要保证和原文逻辑一致，确保续写部分和原文浑然天成，故事逻辑合理，发展流畅。

为确保续写部分和原文故事发展浑然一体，我们要注意以下几点：

1. 准确理解原文故事设计的主旨思想；

2. 准确掌握原文故事发展的脉络；

3. 保证关键节点的逻辑顺畅：

（1）续写第一段段首句和续写第一段内容之间的逻辑一致；

（2）续写第一段内容尤其是结尾处和续写第二段段首句之间的逻辑一致；

（3）续写第二段内容和续写第二段段首句之间的逻辑一致。

【案例导引】

When Jayce Crowder was in kindergarten,he began noticing that he looked different from his classmates. They had two hands. But he had only one.

It started when one boy teased him. Jayce was in a bad mood. He returned home in Des Moines,Iowa,with questions:Why am I different?Why me? Why? “He actually told us that he was mad at looking so different from others,”said his mother, Cortney Lewis. “That really hurt him.” Lewis admitted she didn't know what to do at that point. How could she provide answers to her son's questions when she had never found those answers herself?

A few weeks later, Lewis came home from her job and turned on the TV to a news story about Trashaun Willis, an eighth grader from Washington, Iowa. The boy, then 14, had become an Internet star after posting videos of his slam dunk（扣篮）, and, like Jayce, he missed most of his left arm. Lewis called Jayce in. He was shocked, staring at one slam dunk after another.

At the time, it seemed that watching Trashaun would simply be an inspiring moment for Jayce—he'd seen a shining role model with a seemingly similar born disability. And had it stayed just that, Lewis would have been happy.But little did she know that a family friend had already reached out to The Des Moines Register,asking the newspaper to help set up a meeting with Trashaun to encourage Jayce and build his confidence.

注意：

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

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【原文特点分析】

一、原文体现的故事发展构架二、文章表达的主旨……