一次正确的选择

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“我”的朋友在考试时想抄“我”的答案，“我”认为这种作弊行为是不对的，但“我”内心又很怕失去这个最好的朋友，不知该如何抉择。 最后一刻，“我”做出了正确的选择……

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“Keep your eyes on your own paper” is one of the rules that our English teacher,Mrs Smith, has taught us. It is a simple rule, but it's not a rule everybody chooses to follow.

One afternoon, I had an experience with a “rule breaker” during an English exam.When I was doing my English test paper attentively, I felt somebody watching me a little too close. Therefore, I turned my head quickly and saw Tom, who sat right next to me.My eyes caught his attention and he said in a low voice,“I hope you have studied for this test! ” Keeping silent, I gave him a smile, not sure whether he was joking or not, and returned to my test. In order to totally focus on my test, I leaned （倾身） a little more close towards my paper.

But after a while, Tom whispered, “I can't see! ” “What am I going to do?” I thought to myself. Cheating went against my beliefs. I curled my arms around my answers. Then Tom said anxiously, “I am your friend, and what are friends for?” Not knowing what to do, I hesitated for a while. I knew it was not right for me to let Tom cheat in the examination, even if it would make Tom mad. But it was not an easy answer because Tom was my best friend. If I refused him, probably I would lose a friend whom I cherished most.Feeling confused and nervous, I answered, “You know it is wrong, and if the teacher knows, she will punish both you and me.”

Just at that moment, Mrs Smith came and warned us to finish our test papers separately. Not daring to look at the teacher, we completed our test papers independently. I decided to guard my paper so that Tom couldn't see my answers as I knew it was the right thing that I must do.

Language Study

Useful sentence patterns

1. Not knowing what to do, I hesitated for a while.

分析：not knowing what to do为动名词短语充当状语， 表示主语的状态。 句意为“我犹豫了一下，不知该如何做”。

2. If I refused him, probably I would lose a friend whom I cherished most.

分析：whom I cherished most是修饰a friend的定语从句。 句意为“如果我拒绝他，我很可能失去一个我最珍惜的朋友”。

Reading Check

阅读上面的文章，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

注意：

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

Paragraph 1:

When the exam ended, I thought for a moment, searching for the right words to explain to Tom.

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Paragraph 2:

Tom accepted my idea and tried to study English harder.

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写作导引

一、语篇研读

要素Who原文情境I, Tom, Mrs Smith续写情境构思理由I, Tom, Mrs Smith, our classmates What In an English examination,Tom wanted to copy my test paper, and I didn't know whether I should allow him to do it. Finally, I made my choice, deciding to guard my paper.WhenOne afternoon After I explained my reasons to Tom, he not only knew that cheating is wrong but also understood it is harmful to him.After he accepted my idea, he tried his best to learn English, and made great progress. We were all proud of him, and he was very grateful to me.Several months later My right choice has a positive effect on Tom.A true friend is the one who can make a right choice for you.WhereIn the classroom at school In the classroom at school or maybe outside school Why I knew that I should make the right choice, which was beneficial to us.A right choice has transforming power.Tom understood me and was a grateful person.

二、情节构思

基于原文和续写段落首句提供的信息，采用围绕中心提问的方法，构思要续写的故事情节，这个过程一般分为四步。

第一步，根据已给出的文本判断文章的立意。

根据已给出的部分记叙的内容可知，在英语考试的时候，朋友汤姆想抄“我”的答案。但老师一直教导“我们”，考试的时候只看自己的试卷，不要作弊。“我”明白汤姆的作弊行为是不对的，但内心又很担心失去这个最好的朋友，不知该如何抉择。 最后一刻，“我”做出了正确的选择——看好自己的试卷，不让他人抄袭。 再结合文章的标题“一次正确的选择”可推断出本文的立意是“正确的选择的重要性”。

第二步，根据续写第二段所给出的段首句倒推续写第一段应包括什么内容。

分析续写第二段的段首句“汤姆接受了‘我’的观点，尝试更加努力地学习英语”可知，续写第一段要写“我”如何跟汤姆解释“我”拒绝让他抄袭的原因，以及“我”的观点是什么，这样才能确保续写的两段是相衔接的。

第三步，围绕续写第一段所给出的段首句以及上面的分析进行提问构思：

1. Why did I refuse to let Tom copy my paper?

2. What were the benefits for Tom to study English?

3. How would I help Tom to study English?

第四步，围绕续写第二段所给出的段首句进行提问构思：

1. What would Tom do to study English well?

2. What progress did Tom make?

3. How would the classmates and teachers respond to Tom's progress?

4. What was Tom's reflection?

三、润色成篇

在续写的过程中要注意情节连贯， 各部分内容相衔接：1. 两段的续写与所给短文的衔接；2. 每段的续写与续写段段首句之间的衔接；3. 续写的两段之间的衔接。 同时要注意语言风格的一致和语法、句型以及所用词的准确性。 比如，刻画人物形象时运用恰当的动词使其栩栩如生；描写人物心理活动时使用内心独白或者描写语言、动作等细节使其细微深入。