杜鹃花

李奕群

Azalea

儿子一大早就摘了“我”最喜欢的杜鹃花，丈夫没有修理漏水的洗衣机，这些都让“我”很生气。但是当“我”去学校接儿子放学的时候，老师却给“我”讲了一个故事……

1 My day began on a sour note when I saw my six?year?old wrestling with my favorite bush. By the time I got outside， hed broken it. “Can I take this to school today？” he asked.

2 With a wave of my hand， I sent him off. I turned my back so he wouldnt see the tears gathering in my eyes. I loved that azalea bush. I touched the broken branch as if to say silently， “Im sorry.”

3 I wished I could have said that to my husband earlier， but Id been angry. The washing machine had leaked on my brand?new carpet. If hed just taken the time to fix it the night before when I asked him instead of playing chess with Jonathan. “What are his priorities（优先） anyway？” I wondered. I was still dealing with the mess when Jonathan walked into the kitchen. “Whats for breakfast， Mom？”

4 I opened the empty refrigerator. “Not grain，” I said， watching the sides of his mouth drop. “How about toast and jelly？” I put the toast with jelly and set it in front of him. Why was I so angry？ I threw my husbands dishes into the water.

5 It was days like this that made me want to quit. I just wanted to drive up to the mountains， hide in a cave， and never come out. Somehow I managed to carry the wet clothes to the washer. I spent most of the day washing and drying clothes and thinking how love had disappeared from my life. Staring at the painting on the wall， I felt as tired as the clothes left in the washer. As I finished hanging up the last of my husbands shirts， I looked at the clock. It was 2：30 pm. I was late. Jonathans class let out at 2：15 pm. I threw the clothes in the back seat and hurriedly drove to the school. I was out of breath by the time I knocked on the teachers door and looked through the glass. With one finger， she gestured for me to wait for a minute. She said something to Jonathan and handed him two childrens crayons and a sheet of paper. What would she do next？ I thought， as she went through the door and took me aside. “I want to talk to you about Jonathan，” she said.

6 I prepared myself for the worst. Nothing would have surprised me because I had adapted to it. “Did you know Jonathan brought flowers to school today？” she asked. I nodded， thinking about my favorite bush and trying to hide the hurt in my eyes. “He might have done something very bad，” I sighed.

閱读上面的短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

注意：

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

Paragraph 1：

“Let me tell you about Jonathan and the little girl，” the teacher said， pointing to a picture on the wall.

Paragraph 2：

I felt my heart swell with pride for what my son had done.

写作导引

一、语篇研读

（一）基本要素

[Where at 1. and at school When in the 2. and after school Who my husband， 3.， the teacher， the little girl and I What Jonathan picked my azalea bush and wanted to take it to school， which made me very 4.. Why I had been very angry because of my 5. and I loved that azalea bush. ]

（二）主题探索

What is the text about？ And what does the author want to tell us？

二、语言学习

（一）词块

Put the following expressions into Chinese.

[Expressions Chinese meanings 1. turn ones back 2. as if 3. instead of 4. stare at 5. as...as... 6. hang up 7. out of breath 8. hand sb sth 9. prepare sb for 10. adapt to ]

（二）句式

1. 虛拟语气

I wished I could have said that to my husband earlier， but Id been angry. （Para. 3）

我真希望我能早点对我丈夫说，但我太生气了。

2. 强调句

It was days like this that made me want to quit. （Para. 5）

就是一些像这样的日子让我想要放弃。

3. 比较状语从句

Staring at the painting on the wall， I felt as tired as the clothes left in the washer. （Para. 5）

盯着墙上的画，我觉得就像洗衣机里剩下的衣服一样累。

4. 时间状语从句

As I finished hanging up the last of my husbands shirts， I looked at the clock. （Para. 5）

当我挂完我丈夫的最后一件衬衫时，我看了看时钟。

（三）即学即用

1. 我多么希望昨天晚上能跟你一起去听音乐会。（使用虚拟语气）

2. 所有这一切发生在周一晚上。（使用强调句）

3. 我希望这条项链能和你借给我的那条一样好。（使用比较状语从句）

4. 他进来时，她站了起来。（使用时间状语从句）

三、续写技能

在描写人物时，除了动作描写之外，添加心理、表情等描写或者辅以适当的环境描写，可以让动作更加丰富、形象，对人物的刻画更加精准。如：

（一）给动作“加上表情”

Reaching the doorstep， he paused to compose himself， pushed open the door and exclaimed in delight， “Mum， Im home，” with his eyes sparkling with anticipation. 走到门口，他停下来让自己镇定，推开门，然后高兴地叫道：“妈妈，我回家了。”眼中闪烁着期待。

（二）给动作“融入心理”

Torn between the overwhelming yearning for the delicate boots and the melancholy

for my depressing holiday， I came to a halt halfway to the shoe store. 在對精致的靴子的强烈渴望和对令人沮丧的假期之间挣扎，我在去鞋店的中途停了下来。

（三）给动作“添上环境”

①Anxiously straining my eyes， I scanned the toy store， but he was nowhere to be found. Outside， thunder and lightning continued. Inside， chaotic noise rang in my ears.

Deep anxiety dominating me， I was on the verge of tears and stood rooted in blackness， hopeless and helpless. 我焦急地张大眼睛，扫了一眼玩具店，但却找不到他。外面还是电闪雷鸣。在里面，混乱的噪音在我的耳边回响。 深深的焦虑控制着我，我快要哭了，站在黑暗之中，感到绝望和无助。

②Worse still， when the fire died down， the whole wilderness was enveloped in pitch

darkness， with no one in sight. What kept us company was the chill wind that ruthlessly

whipped my face， gradually devouring the last bit of the remaining hope in my heart. 更糟糕的是，当火熄灭时，整个荒野被漆黑所笼罩，看不见任何一个人。陪伴我们的是寒风，它无情地拍打着我的脸，逐渐吞噬着我心中剩下的最后一点希望。

四、续写布局

根据续写第一段段首句的内容“‘让我告诉你乔纳森和那个小女孩的故事，老师指着墙上的一幅画说”可知，续写第一段应该描述故事的具体内容。根据续写第二段段首句的内容“我为儿子所做的事感到自豪”和文章开头提到的儿子摘杜鹃花带去学校，可猜测这个故事讲的是“我”的儿子用杜鹃花帮助小女孩的充满正能量的故事。具体内容我们可以根据以下问题链来展开：

1. What happened to the little girl？

2. How did Jonathan help her？

3. What was my reaction after knowing it？

根据续写第二段段首句的内容“我为儿子所做的事感到自豪”可知，续写第二段可以描写“我”知道事情真相后的改变。具体内容我们可以根据以下问题链来展开：

1. What did I say？

2. What did I do for my son and my husband？

3. What lesson did I learn from this experience？