My Progress　陈传光

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陈传光男，江苏省连云港市罗阳中学高级教师、连云港市优秀教育园丁、江苏省教育学会会员，从事教育教学工作多年；曾获英语教研能力大赛区一等奖、英语专业技能大赛市一等奖、班主任基本功大赛市一等奖；有多篇论文在各核心和主流期刊上发表；曾指导学生在各类竞赛中取得不错的成绩，有多人获得地市级奖和省级奖。

My Progress

Life is always full of difficulties， but when we overcome it ①， we willmake great progress.

I couldnt swim when I was twelve so I thought it was too hard. In order toencourage me learning②to swim， my father often took me to the swimming pool. Atfirst， I didnt like swimming at all. But through hard work and continuous practice，I finally learned how to swim. Now， I can swim more than 500 meters， but③I havemade great progress.

Just as a famous saying goes， nothing is difficult if you put your heart into it.No matter what difficulties we face， we will make progress if we work hard.

江苏省连云港市罗阳中学 张静贤

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优点：

小作者用不长的篇幅讲述了一个完整的故事，有起因、过程、结果，篇尾得出了人生哲理，使短文主题得以升华。总之，这是一篇不错的学生习作。

需要修改的地方：

①it 改为them。代指上文中的复数名词difficulties，應使用them。

②learning 改为to learn。encourage sb. to do sth.意为“鼓励某人做某事”。

③but 改为and。此处上下文是并列关系。

评分：

按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准，本文修改前可得22分。