Forgotten and forgiven 妈妈的曲奇饼

广东 周淑涵

As I sat in the second-floor window of our brick schoolhouse that afternoon,my heart began to sink further with each passing car.This was a day I'd looked forward to for weeks—Miss Pace's fourth-grade,end-of-the-year party.Miss Pace had kept a running countdown(倒计时） on the blackboard all that week,and our class of nine-year-olds had bordered on insurrection by the time the eagerly anticipated “Party Friday” had arrived.

I had happily volunteered my mother when Miss Pace requested cookie volunteers.Mom's chocolate chips were most popular on our block,and I knew they'd be a hit with my classmates.But two o'clock passed,and there was no sign of my mother.Most of the other mothers had already come and gone,dropping off their offerings of punch and crackers,chips,cupcakes and brownies.My mother was missing in action.

“Don't worry,Robbie.She'll be along soon,” Miss Pace said as I gazed down the street.I looked at the wall clock just in time to see its black minute hand shift to half-past.Around me,the noisy party continued,but I wouldn't move from my window watch post.

Miss Pace tried her best to persuade me to move,but I stayed still,holding out hope that the familiar family car would round the corner,carrying my rightfully embarrassed mother with a tin of her famous cookies tucked under her arm.

The three o'clock bell soon gave me a sudden shock from my thoughts and I disappointedly grabbed my book bag from my desk and shuffled out the door for home.On the four-block walk to our house,I plotted my revenge.I would slam the front door upon entering,refuse to return her hug when she rushed over to me,and swear never to speak to her again.

The house was empty when I arrived and I looked for a note on the refrigerator that might explain my mother's absence,but found none.My chin quivered with a mixture of heartbreak and rage.For the first time in my life,my mother had let me down.

Useful sentence patterns

1.Miss Pace had kept a running countdown on the blackboard all that week,and our class of nine-year-olds had bordered on insurrection by the time the much-anticipated “Party Friday” had arrived.那个星期佩斯小姐在黑板上做了个倒计时牌，当这个万众期待的“周五派对日”到来的时候，我们一班九岁大的孩子们兴奋得像炸开了锅一样。

分析：本句为复合句，包含一个and连接的并列句，以及by the time引导的时间状语从句，意为“到了……的时候”。其中，border on insurrection是一个固定搭配，意为“兴奋得像炸开了锅”。

2.The house was empty when I arrived and I looked for a note on the refrigerator that might explain my mother's absence,but found none.当我回到家时，房子里空无一人，我在冰箱上寻找可能解释母亲缺席原因的字条，但我什么也没找到。

分析：本句为复合句，包含一个and连接的并列句，并列句中分别包含了一个when引导的时间状语从句以及that引导的定语从句，还有一个but连接的并列句。

阅读上面的文章，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

注意：

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

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I was lying face-down on my bed upstairs when I heard my mother come through the front door.

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Paragraph 2:

Then my mother did something completely unexpected.She sank down on the bed and began to weep like a little girl.____________________________________________________________

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写作导引

一、语篇研读

读后续写要求续写的部分在情节和逻辑方面与原文高度契合。为此，我们必须在掌握原文大意和叙述意图的基础上，分析所给文章的情境模式。

分析记叙文的情境模式，就需要关注5个W，即：who、what、when、where，以及why。 我们在阅读时要把握故事的情节线，分析故事的起因、开始、发展，并归纳出故事的主要矛盾，根据文章中已知的信息，如情感的线索、行为的线索、时间的线索、空间的线索等来推断将要发生的事情，合理构思续写部分的情节。

二、情节构思

基于原文本和续写段落首句提供的信息，采用围绕中心提问相关问题的方法，构思要续写的故事情节，一般分为四步。