2020年12月大学英语四、六级作文试题评析（一）

马小红

四级

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic “Changes in the Way of Transportation”. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

这道大学英语四级作文题目要求考生论述transportation方式的变化。为了明确所讨论的话题，我们不妨用定义法开头，即开篇先给transportation下一个通俗的定义，然后提出本文所要论述的主题：从独木舟到宇宙飞船，我们人类见证了交通方式的巨大变化。

第二段分析交通方式发生巨大变化的原因。由于本文是一篇议论文而非说明文，所以分析原因就成了本文的重点。为了使分析透彻，我们不妨从两个方面展开，而且每个方面都要有细节支撑。我们可以先指出科技发展是交通方式变化的推动力量。然后我们举出一些例子证明这一点：在古代，我们只能徒步旅行或者骑马和骆驼;随着蒸汽机的问世，我们能够乘坐汽车和火车旅行;现在由于民航的迅速发展，我们可以在周末坐飞机到国外旅行。接下来，我们再指出交通方式变化的另一个推动因素是生活水平的提高。比如，随着经济的快速发展，私家车的拥有量迅速增加，于是越来越多的人开车上下班。本文可以用建议法结尾。第三段先指出随着科技的发展，我们会有更快、更安全和更方便的交通方式。然后建议优先发展公共交通，以缓解城市地区的交通拥堵。下面请看参考范文：

Transportation refers to any type of vehicle that we can travel in or carry goods in. From the canoe to the space shuttle， we human beings have witnessed dramatic changes in the way of transportation.

Advances in technology are the driving force behind the changes. In ancient times， people simply travelled on foot or rode on camels and horses. With the advent of the steam engine， however， we were able to get around in steamships and trains. Now we can take a weekend trip abroad by air due to the fast development of civil aviation. Another contributing factor is the improvement in living standard. For example， with the economy developing rapidly， private vehicle ownership has been growing by leaps and bounds. As a result， increasing numbers of people drive to and from work in the comfort of their cars.

With technology advancing， we will have faster， safer and more convenient transportation options. It is advised that priority be given to the development of public transport to ease traffic congestion in metro areas. （172 words）

语言亮点借鉴：

1. Advances in technology are the driving force behind the changes.（技术进步是这些变化背后的推动力量。）

2. With the advent of the steam engine， however， we were able to get around in steamships and trains.（而隨着蒸汽机的问世，我们能够乘坐轮船和火车到处旅行。）get around到处旅行。

3. Another contributing factor is the improvement in living standard.（另一个起作用的因素是生活水平的提高。）“Another contributing factor is …”是分析第二条原因的常见写法。

4. For example， with the economy developing rapidly， private vehicle ownership has been growing by leaps and bounds.（例如，随着经济的快速发展，私家车的拥有量迅速增加。……