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本期话题：学生是否应该课后找老师补课？

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学会表达自己的观点并陈述理由是高中学生应该重点掌握的。写这类文章时，学生必须首先要明确自己的观点：赞成还是反对，而后层次清晰地进行论证，最后水到渠成地得出结论。以上两篇文章是就“学生是否应该课后找老师补课”这个话题进行论证，第一位同学持赞成意见，第二位同学表达反对的观点。两位作者观点明确，论证有力，使用了高级词汇如：acquire plenty of new knowledge，gain much popularity among， be bound to achieve good academic grades and embrace success， make reasonable arrangements， lead to serious physical and psychological problems等为文章添色加彩；文中也出现了很多高级句型如：go over what have been learnt in class， which may lead to many problems being unable to solve； tutor's help， which has a negative impact on developing independent and creative thoughts in the long term，is certain to deprive us of the chance of learning by ourselves。这些句型很好地糅合了宾语从句、非限制性定语从句以及动名词做介词后的宾语的用法，体现了小作者们深厚的语言功底，是文章的亮点。

点评教师：扬中市第二高级中学 朱晓虹

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这四篇学生习作围绕Should students find tutors after class这一话题进行论述。总体上看，无论是正方还是反方，四位同学的习作结构比较清晰，即在开头鲜明地表达观点，然后提出合理的论据，最后在结尾处简明地重申观点。在此过程中，论据的表达逻辑清楚，论据提出的顺序体现了各个论据重要性的差异，而且论据之间使用了有效的连接词如above all， moreover， last but not least， on top of this， all in all等等。

其次，语言表达方面，四位同学都使用了一些地道的词汇，意思清楚，使用恰当，表达准确，如tutor classes are usually in a smaller size， receive proper training， broaden their horizons， higher efficiency and better performance， it makes no sense to find tutors， gain access to knowledge， polish up their learning skills， come to their aid， make a huge difference， put extra stress on， under certain circumstances， can be a way out， more important should be attached to等等。一些情态动词的使用也比较自然贴切，如 after-class tutoring can be extremely expensive， finding a tutor may help them make the most of their time等等。

四位同学都有意识地使用复杂句式和语法形式来表达观点，这一点也比较出彩，如That being said， when under certain circumstances where students found it hopeless to...这句中使用了独立主格结构、时间状语从句、定于从句等。又如…for those students who have some free time after finishing their schoolwork， they want to polish up their learning skills. Tutors can come to their aid and help them to improve efficiency， which makes a huge difference.這句中用到了限定性和非限定性定语从句。此外，Whether students should find tutors after class has been a hot topic for a long time.一句中使用了主语从句。这些语法形式的使用增加了语言的表现力，使表达复杂的观点成为可能，进而使说理论述更加令人信服。

点评教师：南京师大附中 赵洁